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In the Valley of The Tempest

Posted by WritersBlock - November 3rd, 2009


I'm starting to crank out material for my novel for National Novel Writing Month. I'm posting the first draft on my blog for you guys to read as I write, so far I've got the first 6 "chapters" of the exposition up. Been trying to get some major assignments done at the same time so I'm having to juggle priorities. Anyway, here's the links:

Chapter 1: Voyager
[COMPLETE]

The tempest stirs, the city trembles, a man dies of unnatural causes.

In the Valley of the Tempest 1: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 1: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 1: 7-9

In the Valley of the Tempest 1: 10

Chapter 2: Treefingers
[COMPLETE]

Something's in the water. Something bloated and fetid and floating. In amongst the long weeds and foamscum, it floats by.

In the Valley of the Tempest 2: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 2: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 2: 7-9

In the Valley of the Tempest 2: 10

Chapter 3: Oil and Water
[COMPLETE]

Taste it. Drink in the purity and wallow in the truth that you'll never taste pure again. No one ever will, because of your fingerprints, of your dry lips, of your tarnished existence.

In the Valley of the Tempest 3: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 3: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 3: 7-10

Chapter 4: The Cold Acre
[COMPLETE]

Winters come and winters go. You can tell by the freezing and thawing of your hands. But when the winters last forever, that's when you come to know nothing at all.

In the Valley of the Tempest 4: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 4: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 4: 7-9

In the Valley of the Tempest 4: 10

Chapter 5: Butterflies and Hurricanes
[COMPLETE]

The tempest stirs, the city trembles, and they all fall down. A war is coming, and they ask you this one question; are you in or are you out?

In the Valley of the Tempest 5: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 5: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 5: 7-10

Chapter 6: No Path To Follow
[COMPLETED]

There is the place that shouldn't be, yet there it is regardless. There are the people that shake the world, there, in the place that shouldn't be.

In the Valley of the Tempest 6: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 6: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 6: 7-9

In the Valley of the Tempest 6: 10

Chapter 7: Battle Royale
[COMPLETED]

Some ships carry passengers from place to place. Some ships explore to the furthest regions of this world. Some ships just drop bombs.

In the Valley of the Tempest 7: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 7: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 7: 7-10

Chapter 8: The Tempest
[COMPLETED]

The Tempest stirs. The city trembles. No backing out. Success and failure both lie on the brink of tomorrow.

In the Valley of the Tempest 8: 1-3

In the Valley of the Tempest 8: 4-6

In the Valley of the Tempest 8: 7-10

Chapter 9: Rising Up From the Ashes
[COMPLETED]

The Tempest stirs, the city trembles; no more.

In the Valley of the Tempest 9: 1-5

In the Valley of the Tempest 9: 6-10

Enjoy!

WORD COUNT: 48,819

[note] I'll update the links as I post the material.

[*note] For those of you interested, the chapters are all named after song titles. It was an idea that came to me today, and I think they're much better, and more poetic than my previous titles. And they're also a bit more ambiguous as far as plots go.


Comments

I imagine, since this is a first draft that you'll be back to the editing blackboard after you get it all done. Be wary of changing tenses, I know that it's neat stylistically, but it can be confusing. I haven't gotten through it all, but it's an interesting piece of work, well done :)

Yeah, I'll be editing through it the months after I finish. Then I hope to send it off to publishing companies to look through. If my edits are any good.

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Should I read it piece-by-piece, or wait until its all done??

It's up to you, really. It's going to be 50,000 words when it's all done, so you'd get through it quicker going piece by piece. It all depends on how fast I work through it. I'm behind schedule at the moment, by about 8,000 words, so over the next few weeks I'll hopefully get a lot of writing done. Aiming to have chapter 2 done over the next few days.

Note to self to read at a later date. Hard at the moment with no home computer, but I'll make sure I read this in due course.

Hope it's going well.

Thanks Leanne. <3

Whoah, that's a huge read man. I'd rather read this when it's all finished but that may take a looong time :P It's sounding damn well awesome, and did you use songtitles for all of your chapters? Pretty original :3

It should hopefully be finished in the next 12 days.

And yeah they're all song titles. In order the bands are; Daft Punk, Radiohead, Incubus, Augie March, Muse, The Chemical Brothers, Pendulum, Does It Offend You, Yeah? and The Living End.

Is butterflies and Hurricanes named after the Muse song?

Just wondering.

Right now I've read up to chapter 1 part 4 and so far it's pretty interesting/

Yes it is.

And I'm glad you like it so far. Personally, I think it gets better the further you get into it. More action and some good (well I think it's good *bias*) character development. I hope you keep reading it. :3

I Promise, I will read it when it is 100% finished. Also, I will read it 100% better then gagsy will read it.

How are you going to get 100% better than reading it naked?