Score: 2

"Not much of a flash..."

submission: Windows Errors 2007

date: February 7, 2008

I don't really enjoy this sort of thing. As far as I know you just grabbed a bunch of "funny" error messages off a website, and there are some much better windows parodies out there, that have some more originality to them. The presentation is poor. A couple of buttons, forward and back? That means it's just a slideshow! You could have at least made the actual error messages into buttons. You could have done a ton of stuff to make this better, have an on/off button for the music, have more than one song to choose from. Have a proper background, make the buttons more aesthetic, make it more interactive. Make it something you can be proud of, use your own jokes, the different versions of windows error messages makes it look even more mediochre. I hope you try harder and put much more effort into your next flash. It's nothing personal, it's just that anyone could string together a flash like this in half an hour, without any real knowledge of flash beforehand.

Sorry =/

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Score: 9

"This was a great flash"

submission: Inward Singing

date: February 7, 2008

Graphics were great, theway you constructed the scene around the conversation. 1 isseu I had was where you changed their appearance, they had no noses, and then a moment later, they did! It'd be better if you kept it all in one style. But other than that, it was awesome, great to watch, funny, too!

Good job.

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Score: 10

"High quality animation"

submission: Darfur Satire Shorts

date: February 4, 2008

The plots were also very well laid out. You did a brilliant job of emulating south park and transformers. The jokes were funny, and it's great that you're backing your animation with not-so-subliminal messages. Good job. 10/10. 5/5. I don't have any suggestions for improvement, except perhaps that after the south park short, it goes back to the menu instead of flowing straight into the transformers short.

Cheers.

WB

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Score: 4

"Nice idea"

submission: Sand

date: February 4, 2008

The execution of the idea could have been better, though.
It's too short to develop much interesting happenings. The FBF drawing could be better, it needs to have more artistic flare, if you know what I mean. It'd be great if you could animate the wave FBF, to give it a more fluent and natural motion, although I imagine it would be tricky to pull that off well, the wave, as you have it now requires a more natural edge to it, it doesn't really flow like a wave should. I did like the concept, it's interesting, kind of reminds me of the "Pass my flash" collab. I think if you could get that sort of vibe with the animation, it'd be more appealing.
Nice start, I'd like to see this idea developed further, though.

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Score: 7

"Pretty funny"

submission: BlueHippo's a BBS mod! :0

date: February 4, 2008

Lol @ ban message. So you got yourself banned, got your ban lifted and got BlueHippo to voice act, just so you could make a joke about your head exploding and the possibility of a de-modding... nice. Although it is entertaining, it's short and quite crude (animation-wise) so if you keep this style up, you'll entertain me, but you probably won't get a 10 from me. But that's not a bad thing.
Nice setup.

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Score: 3

"Graphics need to improve"

submission: Godzillas Depression

date: February 3, 2008

Yeah, the combination of sprite/hand drawn does make godzilla look very weird. You should definitely stick to one style throughout the flash. The FBF type stuff is done pretty average. You should try doing a lot more tweening, create symbols for each moving part you have. That way, the movement will be a lot more smooth and everything will be neat and organised. The buildings didn't look good at all. You should probably make them straight and give them a bit of depth, maybe try drawing buildings based on pictures of real buildings. Also, if you have a microphone, it'd be nice to get some voice acting into this, it's quite plain with the speech bubbles. If you don't have a microphone, if you improve your animating standards you could maybe get a voice actor to work with you.
The plot could've been worse, but it wasn't great. I mean, godzilla attempting suicide because some guy said that he's got no genitals? And the gun, it's all quite random. If you work on that, a more fluent plot, better graphics, I think you'd do okay.
Not bad but you've still got a way to go. Hope I helped.

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Score: 7

"Nothing unusual thar!"

submission: Inside the mind of SBC

date: January 31, 2008

Although I couldn't help but notice a severe lack of melting clocks. And you probably could have added a couple of sundials here and there.
But on the whole, I think you touched on some pretty interesting materials.
Can you do my mind next?
Do me! Do me! Do me!
Wait, that comes out wrong...
Oh, what the heck, do me anyway =P

It's a nice abstract animation.

Score: 9

"Nice"

submission: Turf war

date: January 31, 2008

Graphics and gravity was really good. I like the worms type setup. That's great. Although a destructable landscape and/or more weapons would be nice. It's a good fun game, a little slow, but it's decent. I spent quite a while on this, the weapons didn't inflict all that much damage... But it was an entertaining game.

Score: 8

"It's pretty good"

submission: Stan and Joe Shorts 1

date: January 31, 2008

Although I find their lack of arms for the most part, disturbing. You should change that when you do the series. The humour wasn't bad, although I think it'll be good in the context of a full script. Overall, the graphics were pretty decent, voice acting was fairly good, it's an enjoyable movie.

Nice work.

Score: 10

"<3 style"

submission: A piece of puke

date: January 30, 2008

The style is great. The animation had a kind of Dan Paladin style about it. It was funny, it was random. It was very random.
I think that if you can come up with a good plot with some substance, and keep up the humour you used here, that and your smooth funky animation style, you could snag yourself an award or 2.

10/10 because it's just so slick, and the animation is top notch, and it made me laugh. Even though I think you need to make it longer, extend a plot out, but keep the randomness.

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